The smile on her face was still the same, as I had seen her on my 7 th birthday. But the red lipstick had lost its glow and the fair skin looked a bit tanned. It was not the red glowing sun that had baked her brown as she had been indoors for more than a dozen years. It was the dust and years of negligence. I had once shared my childhood with her. The red saree with its golden spots carefully spun had given bright colours to my dreams I had woven on yarns of childhood games. She looked like a bride in her bright red saree celebrating life with golden bangles, tingling the bell of festivity. She smelt of jasmine. Now, her beauty is a blurred reflection of the past. The bangles are broken and red saree has faded. She now smells of kerosene that I had once accidentally spilled on her. Her smile did not elicit a smile from me. But I was tempted to pick her up from my closet. There she lay for seventeen years, uncared and...
Celebrating the self with a different beat! In each breath, each step.
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ReplyDeletearah...i loved the poem with d image together..
ReplyDeleteit perfectly conveys the mood of desolation...
keep going..:))
August 20, 2010 7:45 PM
thanx dear...but i hav serious doubts about it...its not intense...i wanted to convey d pain...but failed..i actly started it as a story bt dropped d plan in b/w.
ReplyDeletehey...dnt drop tht plan...eager to read d story too:)
ReplyDeletethe poem doesnt hit you in the face with all the desolation, the effect is subtle and subdued...i think it's not always necessary to shout out the "pain" out loud, so i liked the poem:)
ReplyDeletesorry 4d late comment..
ReplyDeletei hav studied a russian poem called waves(think it ws writtn by pushkin), it comes like a shudder takes hold of us strangles us and leave us for peace, but only to repeat it the next moment.. somewher that echoes pain in its worst form..
i agree wit sulfia chechi, pain is something so subtle that even language fails sometimes, bt the best work shows this void..
nic 1 yaar, bt may be stories brings out the best in u:):)..
@sulfia:thanx...its true...d effect can b subtle...but I feel dt if we try to voice d inner turmoil...mayb den...d pain is all d more difficult..
ReplyDelete@Aravind...yup...even i think so....so i will call ds an experiment..:)
"I clutched my ring
ReplyDeleteBut missed the caress."
whatever...it has its depth!
im loving it:)
thanx saf....:)
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